XII. Scene Reflection

One page (or equivalent length) reflection on the scene from the script (see below).

Strengths:

The scene's obvious strengths are its rising tensions followed by one surprise after another. I quite like the snappy and purposeful dialogue, with each character having a unique voice.

Weaknesses:

Unfortunately, the geography is simultaneously too specific and too vague; in a moment of foolishness I identified the setting as San Francisco, but having no time to research the actual layout of the city I just assumed there would be a location somewhat similar to what I needed and wrote the scene in complete disregard of the actual arrangement of San Francisco... Oh well.

In addition, the physics is not very likely to work in real life, which again is partly a sign of missing research; however, since my aim was to write an often stereotypical (over-the-top) action movie, the lack of complete realism is probably not that great a weakness... :)

Potential Revision:

If given enough time (probably at least a year(!)... if it were even worth it), I would probably want to fix the geographic discrepancy: either fit my scene to San Francisco, or remove the link to the real city completely (allowing me to not have to bother about the geography at all, but forcing me to rewrite earlier scenes). I might check the physics on the 90 degree turn, but then again... Other than that, I'd probably want to do minor, or potentially major, cleanup on the description and dialogue (making sure every line truly fits the character who says it).

And then I'd rewrite the whole script from scratch.