Wednesday, June 13, 2012

XIII. Final Script Reflection

Reflect in two page-equivalents on the entire Script Frenzy project....

First Impressions:
When first introduced to the project, I was surprised: it sounded like an unprecedented (for me) challenge in mass production of writing. I was not sure I'd be able to do it, but remained cautiously optimistic as to my chances of success.

Final Impressions:
Of course--I was wrong. Final tally: 73 pages (out of the goal of 100), approximately 2 months from start of writing to finish (rather than the one).

Page Count:
Now for some context. From the pace of the script as it developed, it probably should have run to at least 120 pages rather than the 100 I projected, to fit it the complete arc of the storyline without shorting the development. Of course, I said I finished the script--how did that work? I simply left out the missing 50+ pages and instead summarized them in one or two lines. Yep. But that way I got to write the ending, which I had already planned out in some detail, while not having to bother inventing another 40 pages or so of rising action... So, yeah, I "finished" the script.

Time Management:
And then there was the humorous incident of the timing. Script Frenzy takes place in April. So, obviously, I began writing midway through April and finished midway through June. The late start was due to organizational difficulties, but the one-month overrun was of course entirely my own fault. If you exclude the days I didn't work on the script, I only did about 40 days' worth of work; so my writing speed was less than 2 pages per day of work.

To finish 120 pages in 30 days, I would have needed to write 4 pages per day - and since most days I spent only about 3/4 of a 40 minute class period* writing, I should have spent at least an hour a day writing. (In reality, of course, my output and invested time was much more irregular, varying from 0 to 5 or more pages per day.) And then I would have had to squeeze that work into 30 days rather than spreading it out over twice that time span. So, in terms of time management, I think we can safely say I pretty much failed.

Script Frenzy Workbook:
Most helpful from the workbook were the sections on formatting; the storyline-designing sections were helpful mostly for occasional reference against how my story was progressing, and I didn't use them for planning. The section on shutting up the inner editor was nearly useless (but that was probably my own fault!)

Strengths, Weaknesses, Revisions:
As in post XII, except applied to the whole script. In addition, further improvements would include ensuring that the storyline arc is better balanced, especially by filling in the missing third where development occurs. This should probably include a few well-developed secondary characters, because right now all the characters are the two protagonists, the villain, his henchman, and hundreds of minor, expendable, one-dimensional minions...

Also necessary would be a decision on my overall intention; as of now it isn't quite clear where the script falls in the continuum from completely stereotypical action movie with all the usual tropes, to lame wanna-be action flick that even producers of stereotypical action movies would reject, to ironic send-up of such stereotypical action movies. Anywhere near the outsides of the range would be a success in my book, but I sadly suspect the script currently falls much closer to the middle.

What I Learned:
Writing 100 (or 120) pages in 30 days is hard, and as of now, I don't appear to be up to the time management challenges this brings up. I certainly am capable of conceiving and planning (at least the rough outline of) such a large project, but totally incapable of finishing it on time. :)

*One thing that slowed me down was always having to transfer my writing from home to school and back, which was often necessary to do more than a half hour of writing a day. After a while this became incredibly tedious and I just gave up doing it--which meant my writing progressed even slower.

XII. Scene Reflection

One page (or equivalent length) reflection on the scene from the script (see below).

Strengths:
The scene's obvious strengths are its rising tensions followed by one surprise after another. I quite like the snappy and purposeful dialogue, with each character having a unique voice.

Weaknesses:
Unfortunately, the geography is simultaneously too specific and too vague; in a moment of foolishness I identified the setting as San Francisco, but having no time to research the actual layout of the city I just assumed there would be a location somewhat similar to what I needed and wrote the scene in complete disregard of the actual arrangement of San Francisco... Oh well.

In addition, the physics is not very likely to work in real life, which again is partly a sign of missing research; however, since my aim was to write an often stereotypical (over-the-top) action movie, the lack of complete realism is probably not that great a weakness... :)

Potential Revision:
If given enough time (probably at least a year(!)... if it were even worth it), I would probably want to fix the geographic discrepancy: either fit my scene to San Francisco, or remove the link to the real city completely (allowing me to not have to bother about the geography at all, but forcing me to rewrite earlier scenes). I might check the physics on the 90 degree turn, but then again... Other than that, I'd probably want to do minor, or potentially major, cleanup on the description and dialogue (making sure every line truly fits the character who says it).

And then I'd rewrite the whole script from scratch.

Monday, June 11, 2012

I'm Back

... because I finally "finished" my script. Yes, I know: weeks behind schedule....

Further details in the two following posts (my last Official-tagged, Roman-numeraled posts... how time flies! Below, for further reference: the scene discussed in post XII.

INT. NOPE CENTRAL - CONTINUOUS

The WATCHER follows the motion of the MERCEDES on one of his many MONITORS. The CAMERA stuck to the bottom of the bridge by a daring minion reveals that the amphibious vehicle has passed under the bridge and is heading for the harbor.

WATCHER
(into the headset)
Remember, we want them taken alive. A and B, commence corral sequence!

Another of the Watcher's MONITORS displays two SPEEDBOATS moving slowly out from under the bridge and following the MERCEDES, spreading wide apart to either side of their quarry.

The camera zooms in on the scene and there is a
MATCH CUT:
EXT. THE HARBOR

The speedboats, though quiet, do make an appreciable noise. This filters in to DON inside the vehicle.

INT. AMPHIBIOUS MERCEDES

DON
It appears we're being followed.

JOE
Any chance they're friendly?

DON
It doesn't much look like it.

By now, the SPEEDBOATS have pulled level with the MERCEDES, one a ways to the left, the other to the right.

DON
I really do not like the looks of this at all.

Now the boats begin to CLOSE in, heading towards each other in front of the MERCEDES.

DON
This is looking distinctly like a trap. I'll take us under.

He selects the OPTION and the AMPHIBIAN SUBMERGES.

EXT. UNDERWATER

We see DON, through the windshield, looking around and backward. But more importantly, we see the huge, tangled NET attached at two ends to the two SPEEDBOATS, which has formed almost a complete circle around the SUBMARINE MERCEDES. It goes from just under the surface to too low for the amphibian to dive under.

INT. THE MERCEDES

JOE
(alarmed)
Shit! Can we break through?

DON
Probably, but we'd get tangled and I have a feeling we'd shred the propeller. It appears there's only one way...

He trails off, lost in thought.

JOE
What's that?

DON
Forward into whatever trap has been prepared for us.

JOE
We're just going to let them take us?

While JOE dithers, DON has been getting an idea.

DON
(smiling)
I said we'll go into their trap. I never said we wouldn't come OUT.

INT. NOPE CENTRAL

The WATCHER is slightly uneasy. The MERCEDES submerging was dealt with in the plan, but only as an edge case. That it's doing so now is causing him doubts.

He pushes them aside, knowing that the Mercedes shouldn't be able to escape the net. From the position of the two boats on his MONITOR, he sees that they have just about reached their destination: a RAMP going from the harbor pavement into the water. Trucks have strategically blocked off all routes but one: straight ahead, to where the final ambush is set to take place.

WATCHER
(into headset)
X, Y, and Z, stand ready for capture.

Another MONITOR displays three drivers (in specially placed side streets, ready to give chase into the dead end then block all retreat) starting their cars' engines.

WATCHER
(to himself)
Well, now, you two little escapees... Escape THIS!

INT. THE MERCEDES

The SPEEDBOATS have finished their corraling operation: there is only one way left for DON and JOE to go, namely up the RAMP, dimly visible through the murky water but clear on the SONAR display on the center console.

DON smiles.

DON
Well, I think a successfully attempted ambush would count as an emergency, eh?

JOE
(tense)
Whatever, just get us out of it, okay?!

DON
Hang on, because we're about to go faster.

Dramatic pause; then DON flips open an unobtrusive compartment and pushes the big red BUTTON inside.

EXT. HARBOR

There is a sudden roar, and the water behind the MERCEDES lights up as the one-shot ROCKET engine engages. The EXHAUST is hot enough to stay lit for a few feet before the water extinguishes it.

There is confusion among the CREWS of the two speedboats. No one prepared them for THIS!

INT. THE MERCEDES

We get to see both the passengers' faces as the MERCEDES accelerates out of the water. DON is exhilarated; JOE is trying not to throw up.

INT. NOPE CENTRAL

The WATCHER is not amused. This was not in the plan at all. He makes a rapid mental inventory of his options; it is unsatisfactory. He'll go with the best he has.

WATCHER
(into headset)
X, Y, Z, stand down. Prepare to give chase once their rockets die down.

Before he cuts off the communication channel, we hear the DRIVERS' confused CHATTER. Rockets??

EXT. THE HARBOR RAMP

The MINIONS posted near the side of the RAMP for reinforcement can't believe their eyes as the MERCEDES emerges, dripping wet and lit from behind, at RIDICULOUS SPEED, from the water. As soon as its wheels find traction, it gets another speed boost; then it hits the air and goes into a very long jump.

INT. THE MERCEDES

Cameo: DON is still having fun, and even JOE is beginning to enjoy himself a little.

EXT. THE TRAP AREA

The car continues to fly, past all three side ALLEYS where teams X, Y, and Z are concealed, past all the TRUCKS blocking the other escape routes, and, as its rocket fuel finally runs out...

INT. NOPE CENTRAL

The WATCHER groans. The worst-case scenario has come true. The MERCEDES has caught just enough air not to smash into the STRAW BALES set up at the end of the trap to block the way, but has landed ON TOP of them. It's going so fast at this point that it just skates over the top of them and then crashes down onto the the road.

There is no way to remove all the straw in time for X, Y and Z to give chase. The WATCHER's hermetic trap has sealed in his own troops.

WATCHER
(into headset; bitterly)
All units stand down. Remove all traces. I will have to initiate plan C.

He switches to a different channel using the CONTROLS at his desk.

WATCHER (CONT'D)
(into headset)
P, Q, R, S, you are go: they broke our trap. I advise caution; they may have several tricks left. Non-lethal force only, until further notice.

The MONITORS show the harbor MINIONS taking apart their carefully built defenses; four SUVs starting up and racing to intercept; and the locator DOT of DON's MERCEDES headed toward a T in the road at high velocity....

CUT TO:
INT. THE MERCEDES

DON is having so much fun, his head tilted back, he hasn't realized that the road is ending in a few hundred feet. But JOE has.

JOE
(panicked)
Look at the damn road!!

DON
Whaa...

Then his eyes focus, he snaps back to reality, and with no time to give a warning, jams the brake. Both passengers are thrown forward as the car slows down quickly and appreciably, but the T-junction and the wall behind it is still approaching fast.

DON, his face screwed up in concentration, waits until the last possible second to lose as much speed as possible, then tears the wheel hard left. The car, traveling on its left wheels only, makes the 90 degree left turn with no room to spare--its right wheels are grazing the wall at the back of the intersection. DON pulls the car out of the turn and back onto all four wheels, exhilarated. Now that things are back under control, he allows himself a huge grin.

DON
I love this car.